Tuesday, May 27, 2014

A Hint Fiction

Jayne Martin issued a challenge today to write a piece of Hint fiction—a story of less than 25 words. Here's my attempt.
She told her boyfriend she needed to visit her sick aunt. She didn't tell him it was a one-way ticket. (20 words)
Want to give it a try? Go here to learn more.


26 comments:

  1. And I'm sure she had good reason. In light of the recent shootings here in Santa Barbara, there's been much talked about re: the real physical fear many women feel in just these types of situations. Very timely!

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  2. A very nice twist at the end, definitely leaves many questions.

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  3. Well, it was a "need to know" type of information and he didn't need to know. I'm guessing he also didn't know that the ticket wasn't to her aunt's house. Well done!

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  4. Haha. You're correct, Nicky, he didn't need to know. My thinking was she didn't say anything because she wanted to avoid a confrontation. As far as where she actually went, that's an interesting part of flash fiction. Often there are things left for the reader to decide.

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    1. "Often there are things left for the reader to decide." That interaction is part of the fun for me.

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  5. Poor guy. I wonder what he did to tick her off.

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  6. Or maybe it's what he didn't do. :)

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  7. Ha! Nicely done. This is really wide open to a slew of different interpretations.

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  8. I like it. Drew me right in and now I want the rest of the story!

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  9. Probably it took a lot of courage, and maybe time to save for the one way ticket.. she had to slip out the back door..must have had reason. Well done.

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    1. Thanks, Steph. Yes, it probably did take a lot of courage.

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  10. Wow. You got a lot of comments on this one, Jim. Drop by and read some of the others through the Mr. Linky thingamajig. There are some very interesting entries. Some are first-timers at any form of flash and I know they'd appreciate your response to their work.

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  11. So many unanswered questions. Must be a quick escape.

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  12. Perhaps we all need to keep a one-way ticket in our back pockets. Just in case.

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    1. Keeping a one-way ticket on hand. Now that might be an interesting prompt for a story. How would the person holding it react in a tough situation? The action taken would say a lot about the person wouldn't it.

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  13. You managed to get a hint of danger in there. Well done.

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  14. Ha! Good one! He probably still hasn't figured it out...

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  15. I think I did that once. Ok, I didn't but your story was so believable that I THOUGHT I might have done it once and that counts for a lot!

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    1. Haha, Nora. Glas you found this believable.

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