Tuesday, May 27, 2014

A Hint Fiction

Jayne Martin issued a challenge today to write a piece of Hint fiction—a story of less than 25 words. Here's my attempt.
She told her boyfriend she needed to visit her sick aunt. She didn't tell him it was a one-way ticket. (20 words)
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  1. Jayne MartinMay 27, 2014 at 5:59 PM

    And I'm sure she had good reason. In light of the recent shootings here in Santa Barbara, there's been much talked about re: the real physical fear many women feel in just these types of situations. Very timely!

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  2. Jim HarringtonMay 27, 2014 at 7:08 PM

    Thanks, Jayne.

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  3. moltenisaMay 28, 2014 at 3:33 PM

    A very nice twist at the end, definitely leaves many questions.

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  4. Jim HarringtonMay 28, 2014 at 3:39 PM

    Thanks, S.A.

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  5. AnonymousMay 28, 2014 at 4:36 PM

    Ooh, a new life. Love it!

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  6. NickyMay 29, 2014 at 9:08 AM

    Well, it was a "need to know" type of information and he didn't need to know. I'm guessing he also didn't know that the ticket wasn't to her aunt's house. Well done!

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  7. Jim HarringtonMay 29, 2014 at 11:10 AM

    Haha. You're correct, Nicky, he didn't need to know. My thinking was she didn't say anything because she wanted to avoid a confrontation. As far as where she actually went, that's an interesting part of flash fiction. Often there are things left for the reader to decide.

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    1. Jayne MartinMay 29, 2014 at 7:50 PM

      "Often there are things left for the reader to decide." That interaction is part of the fun for me.

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  8. nonamedufusMay 29, 2014 at 8:57 PM

    Poor guy. I wonder what he did to tick her off.

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  9. Jim HarringtonMay 29, 2014 at 9:27 PM

    Or maybe it's what he didn't do. :)

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  10. CherylMay 30, 2014 at 9:31 AM

    Ha! Nicely done. This is really wide open to a slew of different interpretations.

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  11. Jim HarringtonMay 30, 2014 at 10:48 AM

    Thanks, Cheryl.

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  12. LizaMay 30, 2014 at 4:52 PM

    I like it. Drew me right in and now I want the rest of the story!

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  13. StephMay 30, 2014 at 7:48 PM

    Probably it took a lot of courage, and maybe time to save for the one way ticket.. she had to slip out the back door..must have had reason. Well done.

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    1. Jim HarringtonMay 30, 2014 at 8:09 PM

      Thanks, Steph. Yes, it probably did take a lot of courage.

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  14. Jayne MartinMay 31, 2014 at 12:17 PM

    Wow. You got a lot of comments on this one, Jim. Drop by and read some of the others through the Mr. Linky thingamajig. There are some very interesting entries. Some are first-timers at any form of flash and I know they'd appreciate your response to their work.

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  15. UnknownMay 31, 2014 at 11:08 PM

    So many unanswered questions. Must be a quick escape.

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  16. http://howtobecomeacatladywithoutthecats.blogspot.comJune 1, 2014 at 9:08 AM

    Perhaps we all need to keep a one-way ticket in our back pockets. Just in case.

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    1. Jim HarringtonJune 1, 2014 at 9:26 AM

      Keeping a one-way ticket on hand. Now that might be an interesting prompt for a story. How would the person holding it react in a tough situation? The action taken would say a lot about the person wouldn't it.

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  17. UnknownJune 1, 2014 at 4:45 PM

    You managed to get a hint of danger in there. Well done.

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  18. laughingmomJune 1, 2014 at 5:15 PM

    Ha! Good one! He probably still hasn't figured it out...

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  19. Nora BlitheJune 3, 2014 at 4:08 PM

    I think I did that once. Ok, I didn't but your story was so believable that I THOUGHT I might have done it once and that counts for a lot!

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